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I remember a ruby crown,
By mischief set alight,
Perilously burning down
On your tresses of night.
A leap, a splash, and wounded pride;
Such memories I had.
I know that you were beautiful;
I knew all girls were mad.

What I lost, at last regained,
But only these of worth:
Your smile when you said my name,
And the land that gave me birth.
Cruel truth remaining to be faced,
Demons to be fought,
But a moment with you: there is peace,
And pain can be forgot.

I did naught to deserve this life,
And the debt must be paid;
The land in flames of war and strife;
Her pain must be allayed.
My pride, my safety, and my throne;
These I could deplore,
But how could I leave thee alone
Loved I not honour more.

When I've fought for love of country
And died for love of friends,
Maybe I'll then be worthy
With you to make amends.
As the lightning fades I'm praying
To be again with thee,
And we are children playing
Under an apple tree.
A Maiko (that is, concerning the romance between the characters Mai and Zuko in Avatar, the Last Airbender) poem, inspired by the memory of this picture: [link] Like many of my poems, I thought of it while lying in bed and couldn't go to sleep till I wrote it down.

There are four allusions/quotes from other poems in this: they're from the Song of Songs, "To Lucasta, Going to the Wars" by Richard Lovelace, "Dedicatory Ode" by Hilaire Belloc, and "The Wise Men" by G.K. Chesterton. The last is a Christmas poem.

Praise to anyone who can see the symbolic second meaning of the title. (siblings, shh)

Characters, setting, and preview image copyright Michael Dante DiMartino and Bryan Konietzko,
Poem copyright me.
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Mahira-chan Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2008
Not bad! Its a shame Maiko is SO underdeveloped. They shouldn't have rushed the ending. But anyways. Lovely work, sorry for not getting to it till now ^^;
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FireFiriel Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks. Yeah, well, they had to fit everything in... Would have loved more Maiko tho, and more Zuko in the party, and more everything!
Thank you very much!
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Mahira-chan Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2008
:nod: Indeed! I think they should have had four seasons in all. Or something. And you're welcome! ^^
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saraistarr Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2008
This is so beautiful!!! :)
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FireFiriel Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
Thank you very much!! ^o^
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Theophilia Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The Martyr's Crown?

I definetly get the feeling from this poem that you read a lot of G.K. C's poems. :XD: At least for me, once I read enough of his poems, ideas start chanting through my head in the style of Chesterton. :XD: Especially the last four lines. It just sounds like something G.K.C. would write. :D I really like it, it's a beautiful poem. :clap:

I do have one question though, shouldn't it be:

But how could I leave thee alone
Loved I not honour more?
(and I think here there should be another syllable, like "my" or something. So it'd be...)

But how could I leave thee alone
Loved I not my honour more?
(Or if you just want it to be"honor" you could say "good honor" or soemthing. :D)

Oh, and just curious, where's the picture from?
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FireFiriel Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
You got it!!!! :glomp: I thought if anyone would, you would! :w00t:

OH yes. :D Very much so, and I love it. I think all my poetry is in imitation of his style. :XD: In fact, the last two lines are the kind-of quote from G.K.C.'s "The Wise Men" he has: And we are little children walking / Through the snow and rain.

Thank you very much! :bow:

Hmm, well the other last lines of each stanza have seven syllables... :shrug: I don't really get meter. And that's the quote from Lovelace, so it has to be those words. ^^

The picture is a screenshot from Avatar, which story this is about. (well, part of it ^^ )

Thank you again! :hug: :hug: :hug:
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Theophilia Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
YAY!! :dance:
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FireFiriel Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009  Professional Traditional Artist
:trophy: :clap:
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